Aidez-moi, mes amis?

I wish to post a test for a story I am writing, based on a dream I had years ago. The Green Lady. There is even a picture (bad) of her in my room. I wanted to write the story, but I need help with the voice. I wondered if you could help me?

In particular, those of you from Southern US, particularly Louisiana or the southern reaches of the Mississippi. At the minute, I think the voice is hovering somewhere between Louisiana bayou, Haitian vodoun, and the vampire myths of the Verdonnes in France. Maybe it will do, maybe I need to aim more in one direction or another. Maybe I'm off altogether. So if any of you could advise me on this, I would be grateful. *bows head*

( The Lady of Belle Verte )